2nd Draft of Script

Script
Game time

 Episode 1 - Exam Day

(Opening Titles)
Scene 1.
Camera Extreme Long shot of the city of London.
Scene 2.
 Camera Long shot of college from the front centre, with students walking around.
Scene 3.
Camera cuts to Hallway with Joe talking with friends, James, Chris, Hollie, Chloe, and Jack before their exams.

Scene 4.
Camera cuts in front of students walking.
JOE - Good luck today, hope nobody fucks up! ( looks towards Chris)
CHRIS - Joe if anybody's gonna fail today its going to be you.
HOLLIE - when do we get our results anyway?
JOE - i think its in about a month, but t might take longer because they messed up last year and gave people shit grades even though they did well. But chris if yours come back crap, then i guess they marked them properly.
 -They all stop at the exam hall-
CHRIS (looking nervously)- ugh piss off Joe
-Chris walks into exam hall while others stand still-
JOE - jeez what's up with him?
CHLOE - He's just nervous i think. Hes got a lot riding on these results.
JACK - well good luck guys. the last exam finally. You all still up for that camping week after we get our results?
CHLOE - Yeah im still up for it.
HOLLIE - Me too.
CHLOE - I'm up for it if i get good grades.
- All go into exam room-
End of Scene.

Scene 5.
Camera cuts to close up of Joe in exam
Scene 6.
Camera cuts to close up of Hollie in exam
Scene 7
Camera cuts to close up of James in exam
Scene 8
Camera cuts To close up of Clock ticking.
Scene 9
Camera cuts to close up of Jack in exam.
Scene 10
Camera cuts to clock ticking
"bell rings"
Scene 11
Students rush out of the exam hall.
Scene 12
Joe, Chris, Jack, Hollie, Chloe, and James meet up outside, next to the entrance door
JOE - Well thats the hardest thing ive ever done
JAMES - Yeah well at least its over with.
HOLLIE - Hope you all did good.
JOE - Celebrate at the cafe?
JACK - Sounds good to me.
HOLLIE - sure me too
CHLOE - I'm in.
CHRIS - Ahh i think im just gonna go home, maybe some other time.
JAMES-I can come yours if you want Chris? play a bit of xbox.
CHRIS - Okay i guess.
JOE - Alright then, see you guys later

Scene 13
Camera extreme long shot of the City.
Scene 14
Chris and James at Chris's house, playing on the xbox.
Camera positioned in front of them both as they lay on the bed facing sideways towards the camera.
JAMES you okay Chris? been off lately.
CHRIS- Jeez im fine just get off my back okay.
JAMES - Okay... Sorry i even mentioned it.
JAMES- GET IN! 1-0. Loser! points to chris and continues celebrating.
CHRIS - Smiles but looks sad.

Scene 15

We see the cafe from the front with people eating and drinking, with waiters/waitresses serving.

Camera cuts to a table with Joe, Chloe, Jack, and Holly sitting around it.

JOE This food is just so boring, i mean, come on,burnt toast with watery eggs, why do we even come here?

HOLLIE

did you guys notice Chris? he seems really upset.

JOE

Hes just an attention seeking little prick get over it.

HOLLIE

Don't say that about him. hes nice.

JOE

i will say what i like

JACK

Shut up both of you. i get it that he's upset, but joe's right too. He is being a little dramatic about it.

CHLOE

lets just not talk about it, we don't even know why hes upset.

JOE

Its because hes an idiot that isn't going to get into university and will be on benefits all of his life.
CHLOE
That's completely uncalled for. (storms out)
JACK
Shes right Joe. You can be such a douche sometimes. (follows Chloe)
JOE
(Looks forward with an angered look)
Scene 16
Camera Cuts to a time lapse extreme long shot of the city through night and day.
Scene 17
Joe's house
Joe receives a text from Chloe asking him to meet at the park.
Joe ignores the text, then replies and tells her he will.
Scene 18
Camera shows long shot of the park with people playing there.
Scene 19
Camera shows the bench where Chloe is sat
Jack, Hollie, and Chris arrive together.
Scene 19
Camera mid shot of Chloe
CHLOE
Where's Joe?
JACK
We don't know we were going to ask you the same thing.
CHLOE
Guess hes not coming then.
HOLLIE
Oh wait there he is
Scene 20
Long shot of Joe walking into the park.
Joe and Chris stare at each other while Joe is walking towards them.
HOLLIE
Where have you been? we stopped by your house but you weren't there.
JOE
Oh, i just went into town for a bit, anybody want a coke?
HOLLIE
i will have one
JACK
Me too
CHLOE
Yeah me too.
JOE
(looks into the bag and then at Chris)
Sorry guess theirs none left.
CHLOE, for fuck sake Joe you obviously did that deliberately, can you not just kiss and make up so we can move on?
CHRIS
Shes right joe
JOE
What? about kissing or making up?
CHRIS
The making up obviously, we've been friends for years. im sorry about the other day.
JOE
Okay i guess, (pulls out a coke from his pocket) didn't think i would forget you.
CHRIS
Smiles and looks back at Joe.
JOE
I'm sorry too Chris
CHLOE
Good, now that we have the romance out the way, anybody fancy going going to the forest today? find a good place to camp out.
CHRIS and JOE
Sounds great.
JACK
Lets go then.
Scene 21
Camera shows Chris, Hollie, Chloe, Joe, and Jack walking through the forest trail.
Chris and Jack are behind Chloe, Hollie and Joe.
JACK
So you're really okay with Joe? we dont have to go if you dont want to.
CHRIS
Jack trust me im fine, im sure Joe will receive a little bit of Karma sooner rather than later.
JACK
Okay then, if you say so. But if he gives you any trouble just tell me alright?
CHRIS
Okay i guess
Jack smiles and catches up to the rest of the group.
Joe is just ahead.
JOE
Guys what about over there? clear from trees, and right next to the lake.
CHLOE
Looks good to me Joe.
HOLLIE
Yeah Looks nice.
JOE
Lets go check it out then.
Scene 22
the group arrive at the potential camp site.
CHRIS
This looks pretty good.
HOLLIE
Yeah
Chloe stands next to the water.
CHLOE
Look at the view.
Joe approaches behind her
JOE
the water looks cold don't you think, maybe you should test it Chloe.
Joe picks Chloe up and props her in the water.
CHLOE
Oh my god! its freezing!
Hollie, Joe, Jack, and Chris all laugh
CHRIS
Hahaa hows the water Chloe?
Chloe looks at Chris while slowly approaching him
CHLOE
Its okay, maybe you should come join me
Chloe grabs Chris's hand and pulls him into the water.
CHRIS
WATER FIGHT!
Hollie, Joe, and Jack all jump into the water and start splashing each other.
Scene 21
Evening approaches and stars are now visible, the group are sat on the banking next to the water.
Camera cuts to a close up of Jack
JACK
You know what, im glad we are all friends. Im glad i met you all. Even you Joe.
JOE
Feelings mutual jack.
Jack smiles back at him.
CHLOE
Seriously though guys, now that we are off to different unis, do you think we will still stay close?
JOE
How about this? we make a pact right now, to call each other and meet up at-least once a month.
CHRIS
Sounds good to me
HOLLIE
Yeah
CHLOE
Thats a plan then. What about you Jack?
JACK
Which unis are you all going to?
CHLOE
Well i dont know just yet, ive got all of my interviews soon though.
JOE
Same with me
HOLLIE
And me
CHRIS
Me too
CHLOE
Why you ask Jack?
JACK
Well ive already had some interviews.
HOLLIE
And?
JACK
I got a place
CHRIS
Where?
JACK
Well, if i get the grades i want, ive been offered a scholarship... At Harvard.
CHLOE
And your going to take it?
JACK
Well yeah, why not?
CHLOE
What about us?
JACK
I know, thats why i don't want us to argue and stuff,
HOLLIE
Thats why you were looking forward to the camping?
JACK
Well yeah.
Camera cuts to a close up of Chloe looking sad, then Hollie, Chris, and Joe.
CHLOE
Its getting late we should probably get back.
Chloe stands up and walks off back towards the town.
The rest of the group follow apart from Jack
Jack sits and stares at the lake
JOE
Jack come on were going
Jack stands up slowly and begins to follow.
Scene 22
Camera cuts to close up of Joe walking next to the lake
Scene 23
Camera cuts to close up of Chris walking next to the lake
Scene 24
Camera cuts to close up of Hollie walking next to the lake
Scene 25
Camera cuts to close up of Chloe walking next to the lake
Scene 26
Camera cuts to a close up of Jack walking slowly along the lake
Camera Follows Jack on his walk home, passing bars, closed shops.
Sirens can be heard in the distance.
When Jack arrives home he is greeted by his mum
JACKS MUM
Where on earth have you been?
JACK
Out
JACKS MUM
What do you mean out? where too? Do you even know what time it is?
JACK
out as in outside, the lake, and yes.
JACKS MUM
Well you missed dinner so just go to bed, i will bring a sandwich up for you.
JACK
Okay, thanks.
Jacks mum looks saddened and understanding.
Camera cuts to jack opening his bedroom door and jumping onto his bed.
Jack turns the tv on and puts his head in his hands, looking saddened, nearly crying.
Scene 27
Jacks mum knocks on the door, and enters slowly.
JACKS MUM
ham and cheese, like you like it.
Jacks mum puts the plate down on the side table next to the bed.
Jacks mum tuns too leave the room.
Jack quickly pops his head up
JACK
Mum?
JACKS MUM
Yeas?
JACK
What happens if i do get into Harvard?
JACKS MUM
Then i think you need to decide what you want to do. it could be a whole life ahead of you.
JACK
Yeah but all of my friends are here.
JACKS MUM
Sometimes you need to sacrifice something for the better option
JACK
Maybe i won't like it there though
JACKS MUM
Maybe you will love it there
Jack sighs and turns his head to the tv
JACKS MUM
If Harvard want you, then any university in England will too. just remember there are other options.
Jacks mum turns and leaves the room slowly.

Example Scripts

Example Scripts.

OUR GIRL
EPISODE 1
DRA C981L/02
BY TONY GROUNDS
POST PRODUCTION SCRIPT10:00:00 EXT. SALISBURY PLAIN.
10:00:00 MUSIC IN - NAPALM
A helicopter flies overhead.
The rear operations group are on exercise.
10:00:06 BBC LOGO
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Molly runs to a ‘battle casualty’ to check his pulse and gets
a message into her ear piece and looks around.
RADIO VO
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with her.
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MAJOR BRICE (CONT’D)
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EXT. ROAD - NIGHT 1 2010 1
Three young men (Tony Wallace, Colin McCabe and Kieran
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car.
Johnjo O’Shea (17 years old, vulnerable) is at the
wheel, a rap song blasting away. They yank open the
doors and pile in.
TONY WALLACE
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JOHNJO O’SHEA
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Colin McCabe berating Kieran Gillespie throughout...
TONY WALLACE
Drive!
JOHNJO O’SHEA
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They screech off.
CUT TO:
2 EXT. ROAD - NIGHT 1 2012 2
Colin McCabe and Kieran Gillespie in the back. Tony
Wallace with Johnjo in the front. Sheer panic...
COLIN MCCABE
You stupid prick, you’ve dropped
us all in it now, you stupid
bastard, you stupid brain-dead
bastard...
JOHNJO O’SHEA
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COLIN MCCABE
You’ve dropped us all in the
shit, you prick. You crazy twat,
you mad crazy...
KIERAN GILLESPIE
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COLIN MCCABE
...twat.
(to Tony Wallace)
I warned you about this prick,
didn’t I?
KIERAN GILLESPIE
He was asking for it. Right?
COMMON by JIMMY MCGOVERN As at: 5 June 2013 P1

1st Draft of Script

Script
Game time

 Episode 1 - Exam Day

(Opening Titles)
Scene 1.
Camera Extreme Long shot of the city of London.
Scene 2.
 Camera Long shot of college from the front centre, with students walking around.
Scene 3.
Camera cuts to Hallway with Joe talking with friends, James, Chris, Hollie, Chloe, and Jack before their exams.

Scene 4.
Camera cuts in front of students walking.
(Joe) - Good luck today, hope nobody fucks up! ( looks towards Chris)
(Chris) - Joe if anybody's gonna fail today its going to be you.
(Hollie) - when do we get our results anyway?
(Joe) - i think its in about a month, but t might take longer because they messed up last year and gave people shit grades even though they did well. But chris if yours come back crap, then i guess they marked them properly.
 -They all stop at the exam hall-
(Chris) (looking nervously)- ugh piss off Joe
-Chris walks into exam hall while others stand still-
(Joe) - jeez whats up with him?
(Chloe) - Hes just nervous i think. Hes got a lot riding on these results.
(Jack) - well good luck guys. the last exam finally. You all still up for that camping week after we get our results?
(Chris) - Yeah im still up for it.
(Hollie) - Me too.
(Chloe) - I'm up for it if i get good grades.
- All go into exam room-
End of Scene.

Scene 5.
Camera cuts to close up of Joe in exam
Scene 6.
Camera cuts to close up of Hollie in exam
Scene 7
Camera cuts to close up of James in exam
Scene 8
Camera cuts To close up of Clock ticking.
Scene 9
Camera cuts to close up of Jack in exam.
Scene 10
Camera cuts to clock ticking
"bell rings"
Scene 11
Students rush out of the exam hall.
Scene 12
Joe, Chris, Jack, Hollie, Chloe, and James meet up outside, next to the entrance door
(Joe) - Well thats the hardest thing ive ever done
(James) - Yeah well at least its over with.
(Hollie) - Hope you all did good.
(Joe) - Celebrate at the cafe?
(Jack) - Sounds good to me.
(Hollie) - sure me too
(Chloe) - I'm in.
(Chris) - Ahh i think im just gonna go home, maybe some other time.
(James) -I can come yours if you want james? play a bit of xbox.
(Chris) - Okay i guess.
(Joe) - Alright then, see you guys later

Scene 13
Camera extreme long shot of the City.
Scene 14
Chris and James at Chris's house, playing on the xbox.
Camera positioned in front of them both as they lay on the bed facing sideways towards the camera.
(James) you okay Chris? been off lately.
(Chris) - Jeez im fine just get off my back okay.
(James) - Okay... Sorry i even mentioned it.
(James) - GET IN! 1-0. Loser! points to chris and continues celebrating.
(Chris) - Smiles but looks sad.

Ideas

Media Studies

Tv Dramas i Like
Police dramas - Prison Break, Theft mafia shows
Military - Battlefield, terrorism shows
Family - Hostages, split up
Comedies

What i like
Crime - Alcatraz, Prison Break, By any means, Crossing Lines
Mystery - Alcatraz
Military - Our War, Our Girl
Comedies/Sitcoms - Friends, The Big Bang Theory, Stand Ups - Live at the Apollo, Russell Howard's Good News

Why i Like them
Make me think
Funny
Action
Smart Plots

Ideas for my Tv drama
Group of military personnel on duty are framed for war crimes and sent to prison, they must then break out to prove their innocence. (same with police instead)

Family hostage situation with masked men demanding a ransom. Their real intention is to murder a police officer who is corrupt.

Two former militants working together for an unknown leader. Their objective is to kill somebody, however they don't know that they are supposed to kill each other.

Bank robbery by an ordinary family who are doing otto avoid extradition by the government, who are attempting to seize a high profile criminals plans and find their accomplices and destroy an integral part of the criminal network. They are doing this illegally as they cannot legally touch the criminals assets due to loop holes in the legal system.

5 students are locked in a school overnight because the caretakers locked the doors and the students aren't allowed their phones in the school. Each student has different personalities that will conflict with each other, and all have secrets to hide.

5 students decide to camp out in the woods for one week to celebrate their exam results.Although not all is what it seems, each has different clashing personalities, when faced with danger they all start to crack.

15 teenagers are taking up a military course to help when applying for jobs, however there is something unknown lurking in the forest and with no protection, and no means to contact the outside world, the teenagers must defend their territory.